Talk:Belong With You/@comment-75.25.126.158-20181127053153/@comment-35087380-20181204022619

Alright! Please don't take offense at anything. I say, I'm just giving some constructive criticism.

Adding multiple punctuation can make a sentence seem a little un grammatical. A better way to show anger would be "Let go!" She yelled, rage laced in every word.

More detail helps a reader imagine a scene better, so Mayberry add some more scenic stuff? It makes paragraphs longer xD.

Again, please don't take offense. I love your writing, and don't wat to seem like I'm just saying this stuff.