Talk:Rise of the Empires/@comment-34952067-20181001002347

AWESOME COVER!

Okay, so I’m school I’m supposed to be doing this thing where I give feedback, I’m going to try it here.

I think you did something really smart by introducing the setting first, it really draws in the whole idea of this society. I think you really managed your pace with this story well, I wasn’t reading super fast, or super slow, it fits the whole mood of this chapter. You “created a image” in my mind. I could vividly see everything.

One thing though, you repeated the line, “George, on the other hand, is a Technopath.” Which you might want to fix.

I love the idea of this society, and over all want to read more!