Talk:The Promise Against the Fire • By RoKnows/@comment-39249599-20190424193435

I have not read Keeper of the Lost Cities, but based on this fan fiction, the series seems wonderful. As an aspiring author, this was very well written and I loved the ending! If you're looking for constructive criticism, something I would like to point out:

When you're writing a story, it's important to keep the tone in the light of the author's voice, meaning your voice and how formal or informal you'd like it to be. Each character has their own personality, but there were patches when the language didn't match your tone, so I thought I would point that out.